[FANTASY] Untitled - (cross between Anita Blake/Buffy)

Title
Untitled

Length, Draft and Language
53.7k words, first draft, modern/contemporary English

Brief Summary (not more than 300 words)
Born into a family of slayers, Mikayla Milton follows her father's footsteps as she joins a "security referral agency" called Nightshift as a district field agent. The organization hunts and slays the three branches of the otherkin that prey on humans for their survival -- vampires, demons and garou (otherwise known as werewolves). However, an inadvertent blood pact with the power of three binds Mikayla to a demon and into a race against time to save their lives, with otherkin allies that she once hunted. Along the way, she discovers that there's a bit more to her family than the legacy of a father slain in the line of duty.

This is meant to be the first part of a trilogy.

Sub Genre & Keywords - just in case someone's looking for a novel that deals with "genetic engineering", "parable" or "elections"
Vampire slayer, demon hunter, urban fantasy

Known Issues - let the readers know the weaknesses you're aware of that they don't need to comment on. This is not an apology, and shouldn't be longer than the summary! (You can include more with the draft.)
Isn't this where the critiquing comes in? LOL. However, I realize that I wrote this story in bits and pieces, and the greater picture emerged only through the process of writing instead of through brainstorming. So the plot may be a bit jerky.

Critique Requested - what do you want feedback on? Plot, a pass at the structure, tone, POV, grammar, character development, continuity?
While I really would like the POV to stay 1st person, I would like to know if it is too limiting for the information/plot points that need to be revealed along the way. Also, I would like to know if the plot is believable (one of my pet peeves is having a deus ex machina moment ... I strive to NOT do that, but I'm afraid that I might have in some places). Also, character development is a huge effort for me - I'd like to know if certain characters are progressing through this, and which ones are uber-flat. Finally, my issue with pacing - being that it was Nanowrimo and I had a goal of 50k words to hit, I wondered if maybe I didn't write too fast (I started Nano late, and wound up writing the majority of this draft in about 20 days). So I wonder if my pacing is too fast.

Critique Tolerance - do you just want broad strokes and all the positive things or can you tolerate some of the more stark realities?
On top of having spent four years in college doing writing workshops and such, I'm also an editor professionally for a marketing firm, so I'm used to dealing with constructive criticism. Lay it on. I would prefer honest, constructive criticism over blind, general bashing or overly effusive praise.

Experience & Goals - Is this your first novel? Are you looking to publish? Have you sent it out already and it just isn't clicking with publishers? What are your plans? (Be brief but help people understand what sort of critique would be helpful at this juncture.)
My first "complete" novel. I feel like I should add some details, but I'm not sure where. Yes, I am looking to publish, but I have not yet started on the path yet. I would like a polished manuscript before beginning that process, so any criticism to help in that respect would be much appreciated. I would prefer someone who has also gone through a critiquing process, so understands the depth involved, but I would also appreciate a fan of the genre's perspective as well.

Method of Communication - do you want to email? Chat? Send snail mail versions of marked up manuscripts?
Although I'm open to format depending on what works for us both, personally I prefer snail mail with marked manuscripts (both yours and mine). I read hard copies much better than I read e-copies, and I am freer with my criticism when I can jot my thoughts in the margins as I read along. However, I'm also used to writing a synopsis of my thoughts, which I do digitally (I type like a maniac, so handwriting for that is less ideal :) ). Chatting after having read the manuscripts would be ideal as well, so that I can explain my comments and why I critiqued what I did about your work, and/or ask you about your comments on my work.

Anything else? Disclaimers (violence, strong language, graphic sex, etc.) Mention turnaround time for feedback if you have any deadlines.
The characters do swear occasionally, but nothing gratuitous. No really violent/graphic scenes of either gore or sex.
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