Do you go into description of love scenes?

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Do you go into description of love scenes?

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Nov 29, 2008 - 17 19

If you write a love scene what is the most appropriate amout you should add? How far should you go?
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Nov 29, 2008 - 18 03

I am having the same problem. I hit the word goal but I need my MC to have a love scene. The story has kinda stalled, that is the next step for them.

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I'll send you what I have so far...tell me if it's good

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Nov 29, 2008 - 19 06

How involved your love scene are depends on the subgenre you are writing. From there it depend on the chracaters and the plot of your story.

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I personally avoid technical details and such... after all, you have to leave something to the imagination.

Two of my scenes between my main characters are below if you want to 'read' what I mean.

Scene One:
Before Anja could say anything more, Jesse pulled her into his arms and turned off the lights. His hands skimmed over her soft skin as he revealed more and more of it, her teeth nibbled on his neck as he finally picked her up and set her gently on the bed. The only sound for a while was Anja's whimpers and Jesse's murmurs as he whispered in her ear until words became unneeded and were replaced by one long moan and a shudder ran through both their bodies. They rejoined everyone else in the common room of the dorm… after fixing Anja's hair again and finding all articles of their clothing… a little over an hour later.

Scene Two:
Anja couldn't stay asleep though, she woke up a couple hours later to the sight of the Northern Lights once again dancing across the sky. With a sigh she turned and watched Jesse as he slept… there was a frown on his face and a crease in his brow… Anja leaned down and kiss them both. She sat up again to find that his frown was gone and so was the crease… and Jesse's eyes were half open.
"Hey you, why aren't you sleeping?" Jesse sat part way up and leaned on one elbow, his eyes full of concern.
"I just woke up. Now I'm not tired." Anja sighed and laid back down on her side, turning her head to look up at his face.
"Neither am I." Jesse reached down and ran his fingers along the curve of her cheek before leaning down and following it with a trail of kisses. "Anja…" he whispered in her ear. "I want you."
Her answer was to turn her head and capture his mouth with a heated kiss. Her arms moved to wrap around his shoulders. Her lips moved to brush his ear. "Then take me."
Jesse quietly groaned and pulled away long enough to remove her clothes, his followed. He pulled the covers over them to give them privacy in case either of the guys woke up; and paused long enough to reach back down into his jeans pocket for a condom. "Oops," he whispered into her ear. "Almost forgot." Anja giggled. Moments later he was inside her and holding her close, listening to her quiet whimpers and cries as they made love. Her nails dug into his back hard enough to make him gasp as she arched against him and came. He followed quickly after her. They collapsed on the bed and cuddled for a bit before he slipped out of bed and found all their clothes. He left Anja tugging on her jeans and laying back down to make a quick trip to the bathroom, where he cleaned up and splashed his face with cold water… and willed himself to calm down. He had almost begged her to come with them in the morning when they left, and that was the last thing he should do right now.
Jesse returned to the bed after cleaning up and wrapped his arms around her. "I love you, Anja." He murmured.
Anja was already mostly asleep, but she woke up just enough to look at him and smile. "I love you, Jesse." He watched as her eyes closed again and she drifted off to sleep.

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Nov 30, 2008 - 03 52

I think it depends on the scene, the characters and how much it relates to a story as a whole. In my NaNo novel, I have two implied scenes and one descriptive. There's nothing wrong with describing the whole act, just as much as there's nothing wrong with fading it out and leaving it up to the readers' imagination. Less is usually more, however. I think I may have even read somewhere that more than two full-blown sex scenes (unless you're writing a smutty romance) per book is overkill.

It all depends on how comfortable you are writing it, too. Maybe you could write the scene twice - once implied and once described and see which one fits the story the best.

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